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notes: my first lover by ~peacefrogo0o0o:iconpeacefrogo0o0o:



i'd discovered real organic pleasure
at a young age,
daring to pioneer places beneath my skirt's linen fabric and
feeling things i didn't know how to describe.
becoming an addict was not hard and
i quickly found that i could deliver to myself some of the most overpowering experiences
felt by     
any woman.
my fingers know what i want and
my body tells me how to breathe and
my hair sprawled across my soft plush pillow
sweeps over my bliss and smile, telling me not to stop.
skin turns silk and pink,
drenched in aches and ecstasy.
   there's a power in knowing that
i control myself,
   knowing that i can make myself writhe in sweat and delve in dipping the tip of a finger
into a warm ocean
of senses.
©2007-2009 ~peacefrogo0o0o
:iconpeacefrogo0o0o:

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hmm.
i've taken an interest in the topic...

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:iconhowaboutnot:
wow. (in a good way)
:iconthegingerb-readman:
very articulate. for a "taboo" and often subjectively cache idiosyncrasy, this is almost refreshingly sincere—it says, "transgression is dead," and I concur. the only thing I don't like is the title; there's much more at work beneath it. try referring to it with something more deeply evocative/metonymical and less high-school-phys.-ed.-class, then you'll have a piece that is thoroughly formidable.

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I AM the Saint of blasphemy.
:iconpeacefrogo0o0o:
haha thanks
= )

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"unholy battered old thing you were, my sunflower O my soul, i love you then!"
-Allen Ginsberg, "sunflower sutra"
:iconpeacefrogo0o0o:
aw man! yeah...thanks for the great comment! it's really helpful and i WAS having a really hard time titling it (i must have changed it like 3 times haha...) and was even thinking about leaving it as "untitled again" because i so frequently do that to my work...
if you have any suggestions for a title, please don't hold back haha
but in the mean time, i'll keep trying to think of an appropriote one.

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"unholy battered old thing you were, my sunflower O my soul, i love you then!"
-Allen Ginsberg, "sunflower sutra"
:iconthegingerb-readman:
I really like this idea you're pursuing with it now. my suggestion would be: maybe just "my first love," without the "R." if not, you're off to a good attempt, in any case.

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I AM the Saint of blasphemy.
:iconerin5000:
indeed, and I too.
:iconquietboy:
Good write.
Nice imagery...amazing sensory...I almost felt as if my own fingers were dancing on me.

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"Surely if we knew what bitterness fate held in store, we would shrink back in fear and let the cup of life pass us by untasted."

'Kushiel's Dart' by Jacqueline Carey

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